Wednesday, 3 June 2015

planet seven

          Planet seven           
Jayden



Finally we landed somewhere so we can get out of the ship.So all of us got out of the ship.”were are we” said the captain “i don't know”i said so all of us walked and then we saw some farm anamails and they talked! i screamed in a scariest way they were British they had a cool accent but the thing wrong with them was that they were bored i  didn't know what to do but then i had a amazing idea “i now what do”
i said we could build a cool roller coaster ”thats a good idea” said the wise old captain ”but we don't have tools and stuff” said the captain “ohhhh” i said.”MY turn” said the captain so the captain was thinking for a long time “I GOT SOMETHING”said the captain in excitement “finally” i said in a bored way “what is it” said Helen the werd farm animal let's make a playground with that metal “OK thats a good idea so we all made a playground but it was a small one but it was really fun so then was time to go home.were at home and a few weeks later we had a call from Helen asking if we could come and stay one night and maybe make another thing but we said yes.


        THE END
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3 comments:

  1. Oliver rm18 Te Mata4 June 2015 at 11:29

    WOW the picture is great and I like the story too .I would have liked to read more!

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  2. Oliver rm18 Te Mata4 June 2015 at 11:29

    WOW the picture is great and I like the story too .I would have liked to read more!

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  3. Sarah (rm18 temata school)4 June 2015 at 11:43

    Wow! Jayden this is a fantastic story and quite funny. The characters are great. what is the next adventure is going to be?

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